Dialogue workshop

This week we had a writer's workshop on Dialogue in Literacy.  We had to write a dialogue between two people planning a trip, and then go back and add action that showed them packing.  I tried to make each character stand out with their own personality based on what they said and did.  Let me know what you think and if there is anything you would do differently.

“Chris hurrey up we are going to be late for our trip to london,” cody said “Ok ok I am just starting to pack, have you started yet,”chris said “Yes I have, where do you want to go first london dungeon or the tower of london,”codey said “I want to go to tower of london first, I heard It is a really good place to go,”chris said “Ok we can go there first then we are going to go to the london dungeon,”codey said “Sure but if you get scared I am not going to be there to help you and give you a cuddle,” chris said “Ha ha very funny but seriously I bet you you will scream first,”codey said

 “Chris hurrey up we are going to be late for our trip to london,” cody said as he threw his close into the suitcase “Ok ok I am just starting to pack, have you started yet,”chris said while rushing to his room to start packing “Yes I have, where do you want to go first london dungeon or the tower of london,”codey said as he started to zip up his suitcase “I want to go to tower of london first, I heard It is a really good place to go,”chris said as he checked that he had all his stuff in his bag “Ok we can go there first then we are going to go to the london dungeon,”codey said while making a crying face “Ok we can go there first then we are going to go to the london dungeon,”codey said as he rushed to the car to put his suitcase in “Sure but if you get scared I am not going to be there to help you and give you a cuddle,” chris said “Ha ha very funny but seriously I bet you you will scream first,”codey said